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Street fight by ~will2bill:iconwill2bill:



I exhaled slowly, closing my eyes. I slowly rolled my neck and waited for the action to start. It came, from a guy on my left. It was faster than I’d expected from punks like these, but still nothing to match me. I leaned back and swung my arm out hard, connecting with his stomach. I jumped on his back as he keeled forward and lunged toward another punk, my feet slamming into his chest and sending him sprawling. In the moment it took me to get my balance back, the rest of the gang had figured out what was happening and had reformed the circle around me, looking considerably more alert. A few drew knives. This time when one lunged I dropped to the floor, swinging my foot up to connect with his face. I swept my legs round using my hands to hold me above the ground cutting his feet from under him. He fell sideways and as I completed my circle I kicked him hard in the chest knocking him backwards into the circle of men. The group moved more cautiously now, beginning to see the overwhelming difference in ability. I stood up, waiting for the next charge. They came as three this time, all armed. As the first one stabbed I jumped, landing behind and knocking him forward on to the knife of the second. The third threw his, and followed immediately after forcing me to dive to the floor again, kicking him over me and against the wall of the alley. Another two of their members down and the remaining six were looking extremely nervous. I grabbed the thirds thrown knife and hurled it and the second who was busy trying to extricate himself from the quickly dying first. Two more rushed at me from behind, but were both immediately dropped as I jumped forward onto my hands and kicked back with my legs. The remaining three ran for it, heading out of the alley.  I ran at the wall, using my momentum to go a small way up it before jumping off it onto the back of the straggler, jumping again of him as he fell, and kicking forward, colliding with the remaining two as they turned back to see what I had done.
©2008 ~will2bill
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I haven't written anything in ages, save one thing, which is a WIP I have going with someone....but that's besides the point. Anyways, random fight scene, which is the...third? fourth? one that I've put up here. They're a hell of a lot of fun to write, but really hard (as you can see by how much i fail at them). It's particularly a bitch trying to do them in the present tense (which makes for a better fight scene). It's part of the reason I did this, to improve my writing in that area. Not sure it worked, but it was fun anyway.
I may illustrate it, I'm not sure.

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~sammywa:iconsammywa: Apr 17, 2008, 2:15:05 AM
It's pretty well written actually. There's something a little weird about it being written in first person, but it works. A little note to you though, I'm pretty sure it's actually in past tense. Present tense would be more like "I'm running at the wall.." which is really crazy, and would probably only work well in poetry. Feel free to experiment though if you want.

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My sincerest apologies for any unintentional offensive comments in the above post.
~will2bill:iconwill2bill: Apr 17, 2008, 3:17:49 AM
First person is an absolute bitch to write. Seriously, it fucks with your head, and then there's tenses...I fail at tenses, always have, and those to problems together....yeah. I'm running at the wall....it's difficult, I justify my use with immediate future tense, he sort of saying it as he does it so he would be talking in the past tense...if that makes sense, it probably doesn't.

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I am a complexly divisive individual capable of a lot of little perplexities that to many have meaning no greater than that of a small gnat. However, to a particularly few I weave a web of scalpels, sown together with fine wine and cheese.
~sammywa:iconsammywa: Apr 18, 2008, 6:15:01 AM
Spaz.

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...said the spider to the fly.

My sincerest apologies for any unintentional offensive comments in the above post.
~will2bill:iconwill2bill: Apr 18, 2008, 8:09:14 AM
oh shush.

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I am a complexly divisive individual capable of a lot of little perplexities that to many have meaning no greater than that of a small gnat. However, to a particularly few I weave a web of scalpels, sown together with fine wine and cheese.